Long trip in a short boat
I knew when I launched -
my Canoe -
Into the river of her -
Whitewater eyes -
That I was in for a troubling
Ride -
And wouldn't be back -
For Days.
posted by Lane Savant at 10:44 AM
Long trip in a short boat
I knew when I launched -
my Canoe -
Into the river of her -
Whitewater eyes -
That I was in for a troubling
Ride -
And wouldn't be back -
For Days.
posted by Lane Savant at 10:44 AM
15 Comments:
Alright smartass, after I professed my admiration for your poetic meanderings, and admitted it was good stuff--but didn't want it to outshine my own poem, SENTINEL--here you are posting it for the world to peruse and read right here on FFTL.
So, hey, what's a 1/8th Cherokee lad to do? I posted it ASAP on FFTR.
I like it for several reasons. For one thing it is always a joy when you write any kind of poetry, or poetic prose, which can be morphed into poetry. And I like your ambiguity and sneaky symbolism. Is this a love poem? Are we talking about Emily, or your first "ride" sexually, your motorcycle? What is your "Canoe"? What is her "river"?
All this from a few hurried lines scribbled down by you one moment in time. Poetry is fun, enit?
Glenn
Hallo, Lane!
Where was this trip -- or is it in your poetic imagination ??
Tschüß,
Anonomann & LL
P.S. Talvi has an excellent new blog in his site "www.schmaltzuberalles.blogspot.com". Jeremy still has nothing since "Schubertt".
I never had an experience like that with any woman not even Meighan.
(well, maybe Ellen)
So it must be symbolic of something or other than a intersexual journey.
Maybe I'll do a Freudian analysis of it one of these days.
F'r instance the canoe is longer than it is wide so it could represent the penis yet at the same time it is something you climb into so it is also a vagina, it has that shape.
The river is a dynamic symbol of an uncontrollable life force go there and you take your chances.
Her eyes symbolizing the promises that the future holds.
It's probably just an account of my aborted and idiotic attempt at being somebody through music and my
screwball relation to the Scumsucking garbage Seattle Symphony Orchestra.
Ah-Hah!! The explication was afoot as Sherlock used to say. I knew it! The poem was fraught with sexual and artiistic symbolism. One things when they are "artistic" in nature, that they can get away with scribbling some lines down, and posting them--but nooooo, the symbols and deeper meanings find a way to be included.
Glenn
That, of course would be, or woodbe, "think" and not "things", enit.
You better have written this poem about me, lover boy--or there will be hell to pay.
......Emily
Piss poor poetry, sir. You need more blood and gore, for sure.
......Eddie Allen Poo
I dug the poem, dude. It seems to bring out your deeper and more sensitive side.
.....Eddy Emerald
I have no goddamned idea what in hell this poem is talking about; it is doublespeak and nonsense.
....General George Patton
Actually, you might be able to publish your poetry, and make your reputation as a poet; rather than banging your head bloody on Music's door.
........Bobby Dylan
Would have been more romantic to mention fried banana and peanut butter sandwiches.
.............E.Presley
I am not sure, but I sense some Communist propaganda within the lines of this poem. I will recommend that you be watched, young man.
.......J. Edgar Hooover
PS: Do you take a dare?
You always were a Commie sympathizer. That's why you such a poor small business owner; afraid of work, rather have Uncle Sam take care of your sorry ass.
......Sgt. Rock
Actually its more a description of my short fast trip with the Sleazeball Symphony Orchestra than anything else
And, Hey Patton, you used to run around in your silly looking halloween costume "uniform" and your ridiculous silver plated pistols by your side.
Hi Yo closet queen.
You're just as much of a chickenshit faggot as Little Dougie Macarthur.
Did you ever get within ten miles of a front line?
Did you ever get mud on your sweet little booties?
Or any blood but you got shaving?
Oh, yeah, Emily, you spent your life having imaginary relationships with men, so, lets face it, I'm just another one of yours and you're just another one of mine.
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